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Re: The Struggle
Dont let all the criticism get you down. You just need to play with it a little. I can tell theres emotion just under the surface, bring it out and ...
Oct 1, 2009 -
Re: What My Life Has Become
When did this life become so pointless Please let me know Where is my ambition What happened to my goals Every day is so repetitive There is no more surprise ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: The Drug of Happiness
The Drug of Happiness I’m killing myself. I’m surely but slowly killing myself. She doesn’t want to be anything more than friends. And yet, I cant stop (trying) (wishing) what ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: Withdrawal
I think it is set up well but it needs to flow better. I was a little confused by it which would be good if you were trying to be ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: Solace From The Shadows (Chapter 1)
ok well i def like this but u already knew this. i do think you could add some more to this though. details maybe. maybe something else could happen. or ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: Solace From The Shadows
I really like but I read the 2nd chapter first so now im a little lost as to how it all fits together but Ill figure it out. Maybe you ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: The Dream - work in progress please help
A work in progress that is actually based on my friend. i am putting myself in her shoes so to speak. the dream is fictional but i believe the thoughts ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: Scarlet Raindrop
I really liked but it should be alot longer.I liked their chemistry but it woulve been alot better if you had to go through some waiting before she finds out ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: A Bit Too Late
"How could you not have known my feelings for you?" I demanded of him. "I made it so plain, so obvious." Or at least I thought I had. It seemed ...
Aug 5, 2009 -
Re: Imminent Past
i THINK YOU HAVE WRITTEN THIS VERY WELL. sorry bout that didnt realize caps lock was on. so anyway I loved. it. it was very descriptive and held my attention. ...
Aug 5, 2009 -
Re: Lonliness
This is a very short piece I wrote. I would like to extend and make it my inspiration for a book but guess I just want to know what you ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: Last year i decided to kill myself - a short story
Well I really liked your story. I am a big fan of tragic love. I do agree with everyone about how it jumps inot sex way too fast. It reminds ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: Untitled Project
Okay first of all I think you could have something good going here it just needs a little work. It has caught my attention but only after I forced myself ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: Phantoms
I know I'm just repeating what everyone else has said but i like rhyme. Especially since the first stanza rhymes. Its like a shock because you got this rhyme flowing ...
Aug 4, 2009 -
Re: locked up
I do like this quite alot but it does sound alot like a rap song. 8)
Aug 4, 2009
